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Singer sewing machine - instructions

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Greetings from :iconprojectcomment:

This is pretty cool. Art I usually see is always people, so to see an art of a machine is very different. It's especially cool that this is an instruction!

Now as this is project comment, let me discuss what I think could improve the piece further.

1) Shape: It's close but I think it's a tiny bit off? It may be the shading, but the left side of the sawing machine looks a bit off key. The wheel on the right isn't quite straight or even. But other than that, it's good.

2) Line: You are using both lines and shading. Be more confident with your lines and take advantage of it more than just positioning things. It's metallic, so strong, smooth lines would be suitable. Clean lines between black and white would show how metallic and shiny the machine is too. 

3) Shading: Maybe use softer pencil so that you can shade more smoothly. Right now, it's more like etching. That is okay on its own, if that's the style you are going for, but it's more in between. If you use soft pencil, you can use gauze or even your finger to smooth out the lead to remove scratchy lines. You know these sticky rubber things you can buy to tack posters on the wall and such? You can get erasers like that in art shops, and that can also be used to smooth your shades too. It all gives slightly different value. Shading with soft gauze often gives you a soft reflected light, while fingers or erasers will give dirtier look that may be good for stronger surface. Also it looks like you got tired of shading after doing the right side. You should keep the similar values on the right and left because distance, material, and all that are the same. 

4) Light source: I'm TERRIBLE with light source myself. But to show that it is a 3D object, you need to stick to the light source. Right now, the centre of the base is lighter than the edges, and that stops it from looking flat. 

5) Extra: Since this is an instruction piece, you should go more bald with it :-) Use bigger numbers, and even add some actual instructions. You can be really playful and write funny instructions too. I'd keep it in the same old style though. You could use a calligraphy pen to add the letters for added look. 

But otherwise, this is very cool. I admire you for tackling inanimate object. I find it soooooo hard! I especially can't draw straight line to save my life. Ha ha ha. Anyway, take what you need, leave what you don't. Keep creating.

Cheerios
Blue